An after outline

I've heard of a lot of revision techniques in my days as a professional student. I personally employ reading out loud, printing it out and reading it with a red pencil to edit as I go, and passing it along to someone else who hasn't written it and can give me a fresh take.

What I hadn't heard of (until my teacher mentioned it) is making another outline after you've written the paper to make sure it flows. What a weird concept. But I think I'll try it.

My paper's structure did change a bit after I wrote and edited it. You can compare it to my first outline here.

Outline:

Introduction

• Introduce A.A. Milne’s Winnie the Pooh stories
• Stories for children are generally to teach as they are constantly developing
• Compare to a story written to teach a lesson- The Story of Snow: The science of Winter’s Wonder by Mark Cassino
• Thesis: Although many consider nonsense literature to be purely for entertainment purposes, much nonsense literature like A.A. Milne’s Winnie the Pooh stories are actually valuable to learners because they not only help children grasp the concept of language, but they teach them how to sift out the sense from the nonsense.

Final rough draft of Winnie the Pooh paper

Ok folks, I edited my Winnie the Pooh paper so it's the right length, not redundant and it actually makes sense. I ended up cutting entire paragraphs, combining other paragraphs, and editing down others. So much to your excitement (I'm sure) it's 6 pages and not 10.

Here is the link to read the whole paper. Feel free to read it if you want. Or read parts of it. I always love feedback.

If you care to give me some feedback, please look specifically at how well I made my argument, my grammar and tone, and how well the paper flows together.

Let me know what you think with some comment love!!

Teaching sense through nonsense with Winnie the Pooh.

Alright folks, I know you've been dying to know what goodies I've come up with in my Winnie the Pooh paper, so here you go. Below is the first paragraph and if you feel so inclined, click the 'read more here' link at the bottom to read the first 5 pages of my paper.

I'd also love your feedback on this. As I got onto the 6th page, I realized that this needs some heavy editing or it's going to be 10 pages long. So keep that in mind as you read it and feel free to suggest where I should cut and rearrange.

Picture this: a round, yellow bear, with Very Little Brains covers himself in mud, to look like a rain cloud of course, and uses a blue balloon, to match the sky of course, to float up to the top of a hunny tree to steal some hunny from the bees. You may recognize this picture from the story, In which we are introduced to Winnie-the-Pooh and Some Bees and the Stories Begin, from the book, Winnie-the-Pooh by A.A. Milne. Children love Winnie the Pooh stories, like the one described above. But most parents and teachers consider stories like Winnie the Pooh only useful for entertainment purposes. Reading for entertainment is a great skill for children to learn early on, because it builds in them the value of learning. Parents and teachers may choose other books for children to enjoy but still teach them something at the same time. For instance, The Story of Snow: The Science of Winter’s Wonder by Mark Cassino. This book is written in the format of a story but is still able to teach children about the world around them, specifically the science of snow. What many parents and teachers don’t realize is that Winnie-the-Pooh has the ability to teach children about the world around them in the same, if not better, way that The Story of Snow does. Winnie-the-Pooh falls under the genre of fiction, but more important to note is it’s sub-genre of nonsense literature. It, and other books of it’s kind have merit for more than their entertainment value. Although many consider nonsense literature to be purely for entertainment purposes, much nonsense literature like A.A. Milne’s Winnie the Pooh stories are actually valuable to learners because they not only help children grasp the concept of language, but they teach them how to sift out the sense from the nonsense.

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The Rough Rough Draft

Hello everyone! So I've drafted part of my paper, and you can check it out here. It is a very rough draft as you will see, but I think that you might still get the sense of where I am planning to take my argument (I hope!) Needless to say that I will be very grateful if you could read through it and give me some feedback on what you think I can improve. To make this a little easier on you, here is a list of things that I am most concerned about:

• Can you clearly identify my argument and what I plan to talk about?- Okay so I gave a bit of a long introduction to Romanticism because it ties to my thesis, but do you think it is too long? Do you think that works for the paper?

• Are my paragraph to paragraph transitions clear? Does my paper flow so far?

• Are my thoughts well put together and coherent?

• Is my style fitting of an academic paper?

If you find anything that you think needs tweaking outside of this, though, please let me know!

Also I wanted to include an outline of my paper, just in case you wanted to see where I was going with it.

Thank you!