- Can you clearly identify my argument and what I plan to talk about?- Okay so I gave a bit of a long introduction to Romanticism because it ties to my thesis, but do you think it is too long? Do you think that works for the paper?
- Are my paragraph to paragraph transitions clear? Does my paper flow so far?
- Are my thoughts well put together and coherent?
- Is my style fitting of an academic paper?
If you find anything that you think needs tweaking outside of this, though, please let me know!
Also I wanted to include an outline of my paper, just in case you wanted to see where I was going with it.
Thank you!
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ReplyDeleteI'm identifying your thesis as "for instance, when looking at romantic literature, it is important to consider the elements that may affect the effectiveness of the analytical tool." Is that correct?
I think it would be beneficial to state your stance right there, such as "in romantic poetry, it is not appropriate to use in-depth analysis because the original meaning is lost. I will be demonstrating this in this paper by analyzing Wordsworth's..." Right now the thesis is stated in a vague way that makes it unclear exactly what you will be arguing and exactly what the "elements" are you're referring to.
I also think it might be beneficial to the structure to move some of your history and definitions of the romantic period into the introductory paragraph.
Other than that I think you have great transitions and I like the wording and arguments in paragraph 4.
Thanks so much!
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